英语写作中级技巧：给参加与不参加我口语培训的朋友们的礼物(3)不要过份依赖从句

contactsymon

我们由于从前在学校里学习英语时老师们过份的强调了从句的作用，让好多同学们常常把but, if, although , even though, so…that, in order to之类的词用了个透。这些词不是说不能用，只是说如果你有更多更好的写法与代替方法，则应该考虑更其它。其实好多人以为英语写作或者英语的文章无非就是这些几个词语，外加一堆生词堆砌，这是误解。英语写得好的人，简单的词语排列组合时，采用长句，短句相结合的写法，完全可以避免掉这些口语中出现最多的从句。
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8 x# |& m3 X) {5 \1 \8 D在这里我想写一点代替的写法，希望对大家英语写作有所提高与见识。同样还是留点作业给大家，请积极试写。

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) P; p0 o3 p2 I) c" A* ~" e: ~3 C我们比较喜欢BUT，因为它短小又容易用。如果要避免它，请换个思维来改变你的句子，下面是几个例子，当然改变的方法非常多，不要只局限于以下几种方法。
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- C  P: z: q% E! U  ~, B1)        The classroom was silent, but suddenly a girl started to cry

7 h% P2 \9 G2 l7 TChange : The silence of the classroom was broken by a girl´s cry.
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2)        It was meant to be a wonderful day but it turned out to be a disaster.

; V: e2 ^- O  RChange: What was meant to be a wonderful afternoon turned out to be a disaster.  
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: x3 v7 ~/ P  o/ Z7 M3)        The movie “The Sound of Music” is about a big family , but it is more than just that

Change: The movie “The sound of Music” is much more than just a story of a big family

4)        It is not his method but his attitude that holds him from becoming successful

Change: His attitude, not his method, holds him from becoming successful

5)        I feel extremely tired and want nothing but a meal and a bed.

/ z) I7 M6 J8 u- X' \Change: I feel extremely tired and want only two things: a meal and a bed.
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3 F0 M) d+ ^7 I1 p2 r小小练习试试看：
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1)        All students want to go there, but she does not want to do so.
* x7 `5 O  _4 a5 w2)        We have various kinds of food to stay healthy, but the most basic are carbohydrates, fats, and proteins.
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  `1 A. w$ i9 X5 y0 G4 C还有其它几个从句词比较although 等，我后面慢慢写来。欢迎大家都积极帮助我搜集材料或者提供不同意见！

deutschlandcard

先试试看
% Y; G8 r6 i$ a5 U2 VAll students want to go there except her.
We have the most basic carbohydrates, fats, and proteins of food to stay healthy.

learnEnglish

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WOW!
I think "All students want to go there except her" is best.

  O7 e! g7 k0 R6 h1 n3 X* Z/ k: Q# E  j1.)She does not want to go there where all students want to go.
9 S- T/ @. Q0 ^: F2 j( K3 v2.)Carbohydrates, fats, and proteins are the most basic substances in various kinds of food to stay healthy.

wanwensu

I agree with Deutschlandcard at point 1)
" B. u: w1 {1 B2 j1) All students want to go there except her.
/ ~+ Q- `2 Q/ i+ E2 f% T; S2) Carbonhydrates, fats and proteins are the most basic nutrients amongst various kinds of food to stay healthy. (??????)