英语写作中级技巧：给参加与不参加我口语培训的朋友们的礼物(3)不要过份依赖从句

contactsymon

我们由于从前在学校里学习英语时老师们过份的强调了从句的作用，让好多同学们常常把but, if, although , even though, so…that, in order to之类的词用了个透。这些词不是说不能用，只是说如果你有更多更好的写法与代替方法，则应该考虑更其它。其实好多人以为英语写作或者英语的文章无非就是这些几个词语，外加一堆生词堆砌，这是误解。英语写得好的人，简单的词语排列组合时，采用长句，短句相结合的写法，完全可以避免掉这些口语中出现最多的从句。

在这里我想写一点代替的写法，希望对大家英语写作有所提高与见识。同样还是留点作业给大家，请积极试写。

But
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  Z& t+ W! }5 N1 a0 W4 J0 Y我们比较喜欢BUT，因为它短小又容易用。如果要避免它，请换个思维来改变你的句子，下面是几个例子，当然改变的方法非常多，不要只局限于以下几种方法。
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1)        The classroom was silent, but suddenly a girl started to cry
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8 x3 `" Q1 a  R" z  eChange : The silence of the classroom was broken by a girl´s cry.
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2)        It was meant to be a wonderful day but it turned out to be a disaster.

/ i! o+ p' u3 S: ZChange: What was meant to be a wonderful afternoon turned out to be a disaster.  

; w" Z/ n" a5 f3 }3)        The movie “The Sound of Music” is about a big family , but it is more than just that
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Change: The movie “The sound of Music” is much more than just a story of a big family
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4)        It is not his method but his attitude that holds him from becoming successful

Change: His attitude, not his method, holds him from becoming successful

5)        I feel extremely tired and want nothing but a meal and a bed.
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) N* h9 e$ E" x( W( f3 _5 pChange: I feel extremely tired and want only two things: a meal and a bed.
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小小练习试试看：
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. S( V6 \0 T8 z& }/ W3 m! Q1)        All students want to go there, but she does not want to do so.
7 t0 _! Z5 U# z) y- Y* a* j2)        We have various kinds of food to stay healthy, but the most basic are carbohydrates, fats, and proteins.

还有其它几个从句词比较although 等，我后面慢慢写来。欢迎大家都积极帮助我搜集材料或者提供不同意见！

deutschlandcard

先试试看
" K$ X7 D9 d$ x' O9 a% MAll students want to go there except her.
/ C- d; }5 J+ b/ r5 iWe have the most basic carbohydrates, fats, and proteins of food to stay healthy.

learnEnglish

WOW!
/ I/ d4 n5 N. A, z/ LI think "All students want to go there except her" is best.
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1.)She does not want to go there where all students want to go.
6 k6 D4 W7 L* Z' {0 s" [2.)Carbohydrates, fats, and proteins are the most basic substances in various kinds of food to stay healthy.

wanwensu

I agree with Deutschlandcard at point 1)
6 @9 j' M+ I( `, d; w1) All students want to go there except her.
; Q9 i% b/ V8 L- I, {* Y  I) X2) Carbonhydrates, fats and proteins are the most basic nutrients amongst various kinds of food to stay healthy. (??????)