英语写作中级技巧：给参加与不参加我口语培训的朋友们的礼物(3)不要过份依赖从句

contactsymon

我们由于从前在学校里学习英语时老师们过份的强调了从句的作用，让好多同学们常常把but, if, although , even though, so…that, in order to之类的词用了个透。这些词不是说不能用，只是说如果你有更多更好的写法与代替方法，则应该考虑更其它。其实好多人以为英语写作或者英语的文章无非就是这些几个词语，外加一堆生词堆砌，这是误解。英语写得好的人，简单的词语排列组合时，采用长句，短句相结合的写法，完全可以避免掉这些口语中出现最多的从句。
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4 Y$ J6 z6 k/ Y9 f* v2 e在这里我想写一点代替的写法，希望对大家英语写作有所提高与见识。同样还是留点作业给大家，请积极试写。
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But

) E# V6 {/ |6 N2 F+ z0 S& Y2 `我们比较喜欢BUT，因为它短小又容易用。如果要避免它，请换个思维来改变你的句子，下面是几个例子，当然改变的方法非常多，不要只局限于以下几种方法。
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1)        The classroom was silent, but suddenly a girl started to cry

Change : The silence of the classroom was broken by a girl´s cry.

0 v3 ?3 d7 A! E. f( n2)        It was meant to be a wonderful day but it turned out to be a disaster.

1 N$ ?$ p2 a* b2 u' ]$ L9 AChange: What was meant to be a wonderful afternoon turned out to be a disaster.  
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% [9 Q  M% ?: T/ F$ [2 d3)        The movie “The Sound of Music” is about a big family , but it is more than just that

2 F& b7 q0 \9 ~. L8 {Change: The movie “The sound of Music” is much more than just a story of a big family

. h& y6 L; ^, f* o) [. z4)        It is not his method but his attitude that holds him from becoming successful

Change: His attitude, not his method, holds him from becoming successful

/ T" p1 ~, T8 C/ N" t2 h8 h5)        I feel extremely tired and want nothing but a meal and a bed.
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: O8 }0 n0 ]5 ], NChange: I feel extremely tired and want only two things: a meal and a bed.

小小练习试试看：
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1)        All students want to go there, but she does not want to do so.
6 E$ F/ x! R- |. N7 M1 X& f4 n2)        We have various kinds of food to stay healthy, but the most basic are carbohydrates, fats, and proteins.

还有其它几个从句词比较although 等，我后面慢慢写来。欢迎大家都积极帮助我搜集材料或者提供不同意见！

deutschlandcard

先试试看
/ H( ]- Q: J& c! j+ yAll students want to go there except her.
  N/ v# X; d/ t, r' Y2 CWe have the most basic carbohydrates, fats, and proteins of food to stay healthy.

learnEnglish

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I think "All students want to go there except her" is best.

$ Q/ h5 p8 k! O$ O& I1.)She does not want to go there where all students want to go.
" x5 T1 X* C) t* m  u2.)Carbohydrates, fats, and proteins are the most basic substances in various kinds of food to stay healthy.

wanwensu

I agree with Deutschlandcard at point 1)
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! a+ q/ ?: Q) [+ p! u+ j2) Carbonhydrates, fats and proteins are the most basic nutrients amongst various kinds of food to stay healthy. (??????)