英语写作中级技巧：给参加与不参加我口语培训的朋友们的礼物(3)不要过份依赖从句

contactsymon

我们由于从前在学校里学习英语时老师们过份的强调了从句的作用，让好多同学们常常把but, if, although , even though, so…that, in order to之类的词用了个透。这些词不是说不能用，只是说如果你有更多更好的写法与代替方法，则应该考虑更其它。其实好多人以为英语写作或者英语的文章无非就是这些几个词语，外加一堆生词堆砌，这是误解。英语写得好的人，简单的词语排列组合时，采用长句，短句相结合的写法，完全可以避免掉这些口语中出现最多的从句。
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4 y. L% v: w1 ^5 E在这里我想写一点代替的写法，希望对大家英语写作有所提高与见识。同样还是留点作业给大家，请积极试写。
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But
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+ }" r2 z2 j  r3 J& ?: }我们比较喜欢BUT，因为它短小又容易用。如果要避免它，请换个思维来改变你的句子，下面是几个例子，当然改变的方法非常多，不要只局限于以下几种方法。

0 j- k" m: f  d) U2 u1 s6 \1)        The classroom was silent, but suddenly a girl started to cry
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Change : The silence of the classroom was broken by a girl´s cry.
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8 B: \) k+ p1 M8 H; e% d2)        It was meant to be a wonderful day but it turned out to be a disaster.

Change: What was meant to be a wonderful afternoon turned out to be a disaster.  
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3)        The movie “The Sound of Music” is about a big family , but it is more than just that

' E& m" B1 k& Z2 b( p9 ]Change: The movie “The sound of Music” is much more than just a story of a big family
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4)        It is not his method but his attitude that holds him from becoming successful

Change: His attitude, not his method, holds him from becoming successful

, x8 X/ l* N8 {( l0 u4 \! t8 j: n5)        I feel extremely tired and want nothing but a meal and a bed.
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/ K  r( O! r% }# N% iChange: I feel extremely tired and want only two things: a meal and a bed.

4 B- A$ b( p2 T+ F小小练习试试看：

( [! g, ]1 f6 Y6 e* k1)        All students want to go there, but she does not want to do so.
- R4 v$ W# b1 r+ b: u2)        We have various kinds of food to stay healthy, but the most basic are carbohydrates, fats, and proteins.

4 `$ S4 X# M0 [7 M( _还有其它几个从句词比较although 等，我后面慢慢写来。欢迎大家都积极帮助我搜集材料或者提供不同意见！

deutschlandcard

先试试看
6 z3 s7 [1 X+ x% @All students want to go there except her.
  Q0 H" y( F* l2 m- BWe have the most basic carbohydrates, fats, and proteins of food to stay healthy.

learnEnglish

WOW!
- t# U8 L& M% s: J+ {% O$ MI think "All students want to go there except her" is best.

+ _2 B0 l/ ^8 M- I* L1.)She does not want to go there where all students want to go.
( W1 ]- F* T6 [$ t# A, Z2.)Carbohydrates, fats, and proteins are the most basic substances in various kinds of food to stay healthy.

wanwensu

I agree with Deutschlandcard at point 1)
1) All students want to go there except her.
  j6 A. Q; B; g4 j% h9 q2) Carbonhydrates, fats and proteins are the most basic nutrients amongst various kinds of food to stay healthy. (??????)