英语写作中级技巧：给参加与不参加我口语培训的朋友们的礼物(3)不要过份依赖从句

contactsymon

我们由于从前在学校里学习英语时老师们过份的强调了从句的作用，让好多同学们常常把but, if, although , even though, so…that, in order to之类的词用了个透。这些词不是说不能用，只是说如果你有更多更好的写法与代替方法，则应该考虑更其它。其实好多人以为英语写作或者英语的文章无非就是这些几个词语，外加一堆生词堆砌，这是误解。英语写得好的人，简单的词语排列组合时，采用长句，短句相结合的写法，完全可以避免掉这些口语中出现最多的从句。
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4 d' J6 k# i$ C# U" v8 r. m在这里我想写一点代替的写法，希望对大家英语写作有所提高与见识。同样还是留点作业给大家，请积极试写。
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6 O. M* L: R! }But
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我们比较喜欢BUT，因为它短小又容易用。如果要避免它，请换个思维来改变你的句子，下面是几个例子，当然改变的方法非常多，不要只局限于以下几种方法。

1)        The classroom was silent, but suddenly a girl started to cry

Change : The silence of the classroom was broken by a girl´s cry.

2)        It was meant to be a wonderful day but it turned out to be a disaster.
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Change: What was meant to be a wonderful afternoon turned out to be a disaster.  

3)        The movie “The Sound of Music” is about a big family , but it is more than just that

Change: The movie “The sound of Music” is much more than just a story of a big family
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4 [% a" W# T/ f/ {! q, @  A$ Z4)        It is not his method but his attitude that holds him from becoming successful
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, W  ^" t; }) w) A" a! cChange: His attitude, not his method, holds him from becoming successful
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5)        I feel extremely tired and want nothing but a meal and a bed.

  e% H1 X7 O+ e0 z. RChange: I feel extremely tired and want only two things: a meal and a bed.

小小练习试试看：

6 b# ?7 c# {0 y. K) I7 u# e. J1)        All students want to go there, but she does not want to do so.
% }# m- Z$ P1 i7 q9 A5 g: z2)        We have various kinds of food to stay healthy, but the most basic are carbohydrates, fats, and proteins.

" e) ^9 `# C8 M! ^8 P2 p: Z$ A7 z还有其它几个从句词比较although 等，我后面慢慢写来。欢迎大家都积极帮助我搜集材料或者提供不同意见！

deutschlandcard

先试试看
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We have the most basic carbohydrates, fats, and proteins of food to stay healthy.

learnEnglish

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I think "All students want to go there except her" is best.

0 E# c3 r1 V8 b+ p1.)She does not want to go there where all students want to go.
% q% w! k1 {! _3 Y5 A3 m# X2.)Carbohydrates, fats, and proteins are the most basic substances in various kinds of food to stay healthy.

wanwensu

I agree with Deutschlandcard at point 1)
1) All students want to go there except her.
4 O- d( p7 m. s1 J: E2) Carbonhydrates, fats and proteins are the most basic nutrients amongst various kinds of food to stay healthy. (??????)