英语写作中级技巧：给参加与不参加我口语培训的朋友们的礼物(3)不要过份依赖从句

contactsymon

我们由于从前在学校里学习英语时老师们过份的强调了从句的作用，让好多同学们常常把but, if, although , even though, so…that, in order to之类的词用了个透。这些词不是说不能用，只是说如果你有更多更好的写法与代替方法，则应该考虑更其它。其实好多人以为英语写作或者英语的文章无非就是这些几个词语，外加一堆生词堆砌，这是误解。英语写得好的人，简单的词语排列组合时，采用长句，短句相结合的写法，完全可以避免掉这些口语中出现最多的从句。

8 n9 }( w( G& v, H4 V. K在这里我想写一点代替的写法，希望对大家英语写作有所提高与见识。同样还是留点作业给大家，请积极试写。
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, P( S# k3 z8 D. [# d: s. ]9 a6 @6 n我们比较喜欢BUT，因为它短小又容易用。如果要避免它，请换个思维来改变你的句子，下面是几个例子，当然改变的方法非常多，不要只局限于以下几种方法。

; B" A1 J# {. o; o, j4 P& k  G1)        The classroom was silent, but suddenly a girl started to cry
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. e, Y0 S1 A* ~! D+ A. x7 U& |0 P* PChange : The silence of the classroom was broken by a girl´s cry.

2)        It was meant to be a wonderful day but it turned out to be a disaster.
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Change: What was meant to be a wonderful afternoon turned out to be a disaster.  

- ?( G! `9 |+ d& ?: H# ]4 b$ `3)        The movie “The Sound of Music” is about a big family , but it is more than just that

Change: The movie “The sound of Music” is much more than just a story of a big family

4)        It is not his method but his attitude that holds him from becoming successful

" O" [' j0 a4 {0 ?1 w$ L* KChange: His attitude, not his method, holds him from becoming successful

5)        I feel extremely tired and want nothing but a meal and a bed.
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; k% Q( N$ W7 {% n& z+ zChange: I feel extremely tired and want only two things: a meal and a bed.

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1)        All students want to go there, but she does not want to do so.
7 y$ C7 {: b( C9 H, ^8 T: ?& }2)        We have various kinds of food to stay healthy, but the most basic are carbohydrates, fats, and proteins.
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+ r; Z3 o! c/ N, j0 J还有其它几个从句词比较although 等，我后面慢慢写来。欢迎大家都积极帮助我搜集材料或者提供不同意见！

deutschlandcard

先试试看
3 g' S! G7 I9 n0 P/ uAll students want to go there except her.
/ c% V9 _6 D% T' _We have the most basic carbohydrates, fats, and proteins of food to stay healthy.

learnEnglish

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I think "All students want to go there except her" is best.
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1.)She does not want to go there where all students want to go.
9 f2 k' u0 J4 _1 {* w8 A' |2.)Carbohydrates, fats, and proteins are the most basic substances in various kinds of food to stay healthy.

wanwensu

I agree with Deutschlandcard at point 1)
  {! w9 G  @/ @# J1) All students want to go there except her.
5 F' ~# H8 |9 l7 v3 J/ p+ }( ?2) Carbonhydrates, fats and proteins are the most basic nutrients amongst various kinds of food to stay healthy. (??????)