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lingling

LZ., good job!
9 c( M- z# O5 V$ bI just doubt if sometimes you use more commas than necessary. For example, before OR and after BUT you do not need have a comma.

mayjiay28

good to learn the different culture~ look forward to ur diary 2morrow

learnEnglish

LZ., good job!
6 b$ A5 U- h: T# {$ \! _9 JI just doubt if sometimes you use more commas than necessary. For example, before OR and after BUT you do not need have a comma.
lingling 发表于 2009-8-6 17:09

Thanks.I have just edited it.

learnEnglish

good to learn the different culture~ look forward to ur diary 2morrow
mayjiay28 发表于 2009-8-6 17:42

Thanks for your encouragement

牛奶咖啡

Thanks for 小米and方格's help.

I meant that birthday man is important person for me.
# h3 W/ p, w6 @, ^Of course,my friend is more important than him.

Thank 小米and方格 again.
learnEnglish 发表于 2009-8-4 14:25

8 S; |* P" N0 B; s- I' Hbirthday boy 比较常说的。

牛奶咖啡

17# learnEnglish
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" P+ F9 v% O$ _" H" ZDo you ask me this problem because。。
% N9 y  p( C' x- G/ l- |. y 人可以ask question 也可以cause problem..通常不ask problem, 除非 ask for problem..

牛奶咖啡

21# learnEnglish

' b2 f3 H" B" R4 D; [亲，有几条我就一起说啦
1. 关于 too tired but happy
* i- @2 J$ u+ _$ r; {. v6 T) M5 J这个汉语里的非常 直接换用 too 不太合适，因为too有导出下文否定含义的功能。。
另外这句话和下句直接最好用连词，比如表原因的，串成一句。不然整篇都是简单句的罗列，会觉得单调。
$ V$ r# k3 i- {, g" [7 ~. {3 T2. 关于牛羊肉，那个宰杀的动词应该和有生命的名词搭配使用，已经成了肉就不用杀了。。
8 i2 P5 ]: p5 r( z2 ]* j& _7 H3. In other words, Muslims don't eat non-halal-meat, either.
这个句子很好， 但是这个either 离前一个否定结构太远了， 读者未必能跟上亲的思路。。
2 k4 H" P0 s- S8 s4. brought some halal-beef and halal-chicken for himself.
这句话里用 bring along sth. with sb. 比较好。。

learnEnglish

17# learnEnglish


: U  u+ I8 w, l) q9 Q/ Y. DDo you ask me this problem because。。
人可以ask question 也可以cause problem..通常不ask problem, 除非 ask for problem..
# S) O  N5 T$ v牛奶咖啡 发表于 2009-8-8 01:44

" }1 f* m( A7 c0 N" X" yThank you very very much
1 J/ |* r/ X. r) ]7 x! K(Did you ask me this question because you had seen I had written "I am using the pink phone"?)

learnEnglish

21# learnEnglish

7 l+ O. I: o. C* \# O1 n5 e亲，有几条我就一起说啦
' @$ T0 J- E0 S* R" J1. 关于 too tired but happy
这个汉语里的非常 直接换用 too 不太合适，因为too有导出下文否定含义的功能。。
, i1 T* c+ q4 ?2 U( B* x- G另外这句话和下句直接最好用连词，比如表原因的，串 ...
' G+ M2 ^0 ~9 r) z! r' Z牛奶咖啡 发表于 2009-8-8 01:59

Thanks

2 ]% e! j8 O- H5 i/ gI edited (1), thank 咖啡
(2)(3) don't know how to edit...
1 ]: S- z9 u4 e+ Y1 ?, j1 Y% I9 z(4)I want to emphasize "for himself", not "for others"...

learnEnglish

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