求助：一段德文 如何翻译成英文好呢？英语达人进..

vinustea

Hi,

有这么一段德文:

Frau XX hat nach Verordnung des Kultusministeriums über die Ausbildung und Prüfung an den Kaufmännischen Berufskollegs das einjährige Berufskolleg besucht und die Abschlußprüfung bestanden und ist damit berechtigt, die Berufsbezeichnung Staatlich geprüfte Wirtschaftsassistent zu führen

该如何翻译成英文呢?

我的翻译如下:

Under the Regulation of the Ministry of Culture on the training and examination Ms. XX took part in the Kaufmännischen Berufskolleg for one year and passed the final examination successfully. She is thus entitled to practice under the following professional title: State-certified Business Assistant.

大家帮我改改. 谢谢啦

noby

Ms XX has regulation of the Ministry of Culture on the training and examination at the Mercantile professional colleges, the one-year vocational college here and the final exam and is thus entitled to the designation Certified Professional Business Assistant to lead

vinustea

Ms XX has regulation of the Ministry of Culture on the training and examination at the Mercantile professional colleges, the one-year vocational college here and the final exam and is thus entitled to ...
noby 发表于 2009-8-5 13:47

这个。。。。。我怎么读不懂。。。。不过还是谢谢你顶铁，，，

nikkor2

Under the Regulation of the Ministry of Culture on the training and examination Ms. XX attended the one-year vocational school of commerce and passed the final examination successfully. She is thus entitled to practice under the following occupational (or job) title: Certified Business Assistant.

vinustea

Under the Regulation of the Ministry of Culture on the training and examination Ms. XX attended the one-year vocational school of commerce  and passed the final examination successfully. She is thus e ...
nikkor2 发表于 2009-8-5 17:19

改的相当好！！谢谢！！